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Old Jan 16th, 2016, 01:22 PM
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@Zazaq, I was wondering if at some point Feedback for the applications may be possible.
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Old Jan 16th, 2016, 05:25 PM
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Alright here's a brief review of everyone's app, if I don't get any more interest in the next few days we'll go ahead and start with everyone who made an app.

Xiasmus: Your app looks good, though unless your alien ages different you're too old. 10-14 remember? If you were to add anything I would like to see your characters goals, and general oppinion of sith/the academy.

Darays: I'd like to see your goals as well, also it's worth noting that the master doesn't teach alchemy formally, at best you could pick things up working as an assistant for him.

Tiax: Your app looks really good, though I'd like to know a little bit about you at the academy. How long you've been there, how your training is going, how you get along with the others...

Alatere: I like your app a lot too, very unique and good amount of details. Be warned though you will need some combat, the master of the academy respects strength above all else. Though if you could make yourself useful you might end up on very favorable terms with him.

Ultrasmurf: I like it a lot, you kept it simple and that is by no means a bad thing. Though I wouldn't mind more details about his life at the academy, especially how long he's been around.

BangBangTequilla: I like yours a lot too, though I'd like to know if you have any goals.

Jasontheswift: Excellent, I like just about everything about your app.
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Old Jan 16th, 2016, 06:18 PM
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Ultrasmurf: I like it a lot, you kept it simple and that is by no means a bad thing. Though I wouldn't mind more details about his life at the academy, especially how long he's been around.
I'd thought to put Tzua in the group that had been at the academy for one year. I'm glad to write up how I think he might fit in there. I'll try to get that added tonight.
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Old Jan 16th, 2016, 06:25 PM
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UGH!

I had three paragraphs of personality and another two in a background detailing a homebrew ice planet and I hit some button on my keyboard that sent me back three pages and I lost it all!

Anyway, thank you for the feedback, and I'll retype it while Obi-Wan investigates Kamino in the background.
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Old Jan 16th, 2016, 06:44 PM
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Hmm, how Iliana's training is going would depend on how the atmosphere is in the academy. At the moment of her arrival (and some time after), she is somewhat quiet, reserved, and standoffish.

If the other students consist of a lot of bullies (and it looks like it just might), that would be a motivator for her to focus on her training. Her teacher would advocate for confidence and charm, and use of the force as a last resort. "Never show your true power if a simple sentence will change the battle. Better to hide your most powerful weapons, as they are the most messy and difficult to clean up after." That doesn't mean she won't be learning force powers--that is still a major component of her training.

How Iliana gets along with other students will depend on how long she has been training. If she has arrived recently, she would keep to herself and focus mainly on the instructions and training goals. If she has been there for a while, she will likely display more confidence. Since diplomacy is different for each individual, she would take a personal approach to each student, learning a bit from each of them and adapting her interactions with them to learn and to her benefit.

In all, she actually doesn't want to be here, but there isn't anything left for her anywhere else. She has forgotten about her extended family members in the darkness of her own self-pity. To her, the training is a necessity and vengeance against the killer of her parents deserves a far more complete defeat than simple death.

Basically, if we are setting how long we've been at the academy, her first level abilities would probably require some time to acquire since she has no real class or levels yet.

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Old Jan 17th, 2016, 12:31 AM
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Zazaq - I've done a lot of thinking about this application, and what makes her unique to me. Let me know if my update helps you decide whether Savak is a good fit for you.
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Old Jan 17th, 2016, 02:12 AM
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@Zazaq - Thanks a lot for the feedback. I must admit I'm surprised. Maybe I am my own worst critic but thanks truly.
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Old Jan 17th, 2016, 09:09 AM
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I added some information about my character's views on the academy to my application. I'm working with the assumption that the sith code is something that the academy master buys into and teaches. If not, maybe Tzua just worked out the basic idea of it on his own.

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Old Jan 17th, 2016, 12:18 PM
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It's cool, your master adores the sith code.

Xiasmus your app looks like a great fit, I think it'll work fine.
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Was I able to address the concerns you noted?
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Old Jan 17th, 2016, 10:16 PM
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Yeah Darays your app is fine
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Old Jan 18th, 2016, 01:25 AM
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I've been toying with the concept and trying to make it fit in my mind for some time, and I don't think my current background will work. I'm going to instead make him a noble son from a core world, or maybe from Mandalore. Actually, son of a deathwatch rebel would fit his mentality and thought process well.

Anyway, don't take my background into account yet. I'll be scrapping the whole thing and redoing it with one that flows better. There's nothing worse then writing a concept that doesn't gel in your mind.

I think the one I have now was largely due to seeing the new Star Wars on Friday. Jakku was lodged right in there.
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Old Jan 18th, 2016, 09:29 AM
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I've got an old application from the first Sith Academy game from way back that I really want to retrofit for this game. The following is work in progress as I'm essentially updating and expanding an old application...

 

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Old Jan 18th, 2016, 04:00 PM
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It looks awesome Hack, though I'm worried I might actually have to not accept everyone now. 7 was pushing it, I think 8 might be where I draw the line.
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Old Jan 19th, 2016, 01:22 AM
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I'm sorry for the novel! It is a little unwieldy, because I simply wrote it all as it came to me, and I will try to clean it up a little tomorrow after a good night's sleep and a big cup of coffee, but that is the general gist of Krynn's origins. There will be another two paragraphs or so for his time at the academy, but nothing that is anywhere close to as detailed. I threw in enough reference to canon that the other fans of it should enjoy his family's part in galactic history, but kept the Jarr'yll clan out of the limelight.

Anyway, I wrote him as a 5-year student, but if that doesn't fit, or someone would like to do a character tie-in, please don't hesitate to send ideas my way. I like to be flexible and work with whoever would like to as much as I can - two person stories are always so much fun!
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