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Old 11-03-2019, 04:11 AM
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Round 2; Match 1: Unko Talok vs Yuul

Round 2; Match 1: Unko Talok vs Yuul

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Originally Posted by The 'Honorable' Chairman
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"Ah, it's you two. Good, good. Come." The Chairman's words imply that the contestants have a choice in the matter, but apparently they don't really, because both of them simultaneously find themselves dissolving into dust in their last arena, only to reappear here, in the next one. "I got a little bit bored of the theme, so I've decided to switch it up. What do you think, isn't it great?"

Great is a matter of definition, for really, there is nothing here. In all directions, just a white void. Empty space. What the master of this particular event thinks is so great about that is a mystery. And yet, somehow, despite the white void in all directions clearly going on forever, there appear to be obsidian stands beyond the nothingness once again. Any steps taken towards them, however, just seem to move the stands back by exactly that much, and so they never grow closer, or farther away.

Here you will battle in the white nothingness, under the watchful eyes of of the great and honorable judges:
  • Squeak
  • Melchior
  • Raylorne
Gesturing to two heaping tables with his staff, the Chairman proclaims: As has happened many times before, and must happen again, you will now face off against each other! Only by using the following five ingredients,
  • A Mouthy Gift Horse
  • A Dwarven Farmer
  • A Hummingbird Nest
  • A Foggy Day
  • Inescapable Joy
and crafting an adventure with your own talents, can you hope to survive! One of you will be fortunate enough to be eliminated, a reprieve you each will treasure by the time your time here is done. The other will be forced to advance to the semi-finals!


Let the Dungeon Mastering....BEGIN!!
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  • You are to write an adventure using the five items / concepts above. All rules found here are to be followed.
  • The guidelines for the Judges' scoring can be found here.
  • The entry is to be no longer than 2000 words, which includes *everything* you put into the post. Judges are instructed to stop reading at that time, or to deduct points if you go over. The use of a spell check and word counter is highly recommended.
  • Please make a simple post in this thread when you first read it, to let the judges know have seen it, and that you are on board. It doesn't have to be anything more than "read!", or something like that, though roleplaying it is also perfectly acceptable! Do not edit this post after making it; when it comes time to post your entry, do that in a second, separate post.
  • You have 7 days from the time this post is made to complete and submit your entry (in a new post; don't edit your first post!). It is not expected that you use all this time - the extra time has been given to ensure that, no matter what your timezone, your schedule, your sleep habits, your work or student life, or emergencies that could crop up, you should have ample time to complete your entry. Posting when you are done, and not waiting until the end, is also recommended, and rewarded.
  • You should post your entry into this thread within the generous timeframe, and ensure it is secreted (to the above judges) and spoilerbuttoned. Feel free to also PM your judges to let them know you have posted, if you wish. (DO NOT PM them your entry - just let them know your entry is submitted). If your post is not made within the 7 days, you will be automatically disqualified. If you have issues, be sure to PM Inem *before* your round is closed.
  • Once posted, do not edit your entry. The use of the "preview" function is thus also highly recommended.
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Old 11-03-2019, 04:49 AM
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The Barium Challenger... ...reappears?

Why are we still here?He had a strange instinctual feeling at the moment that all was not right with the universe, that he was most certainly not meant to be here, so soon after the first, still in this strange place between reality and...

...something.

The unimportant voice was speaking again, was it the entity that entrapped him here? Perhaps, but still unimportant. Once more the tables piled with heaps of something were. An even more monumental task lay before him. Perhaps afterwards he might be given the reward of a break from this toil and drudgery, but for now...

"...'at the 'ells is this s'posed ta be?"
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Old 11-03-2019, 08:39 AM
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The Skeleton SpeaksThe new setting did not perturb the Burning Skeleton. The whole arena would make most feel exposed. But what did this creature have to hide? His very skin had been burnt away. He barely had a mind left to operate with. What embarrassment or fear should he feel with the crowd seeing his exposed pelvic bone as easily as his clavicle?

The creature steps forward, moving with more purpose and intelligence than is typical of his undead kin. He looks over the ingredients, and you can see his facial bones-- not quite solid things, themselves-- move and turn into an expression of concentration and planning. He is suddenly interrupted by the words of his "companion" in this place, Yuul. The newcomer wonders what this place is. With great effort, the skeleton opens his mouth, trying to make some kind of noise come out. the first few times, it's just a squeak and a clacking of bones. But finally, a raspy voice emits, louder than intended.

" H-- H-- ...HELL."

The skeleton grabs his own ingredients, an begins a ritual of creation.
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Old 11-05-2019, 11:47 AM
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Old 11-09-2019, 05:37 PM
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Old 11-11-2019, 06:09 PM
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CategoryUnko TalokYuul
DM Perspective / The Technical*(15 points)139
a. How easy would it be to run this scenario/adventure?*(5 points)43
b. How well is the scenario/adventure presented?*(5 points)43
c. How well is the scenario/adventure written?*(5 points)53
Player Perspective / The Story*(15 points)149
a. What would this scenario/adventure be like to play?*(5 points)42
b. Is the story interesting to read?*(5 points)53
c. How creative is the scenario/adventure?*(5 points)54
Audience Perspective / The Ingredients*(25+ points)1917
A Mouthy Gift Horse54
A Dwarven Farmer25
A Hummingbird Nest43
A Foggy Day32
Inescapable Joy53
Total Points4735



Unko Talok
That was a quality submission. Your formatting was good and you did a great job blending the secret ingredients into your story. It did remind me a bit of a the Twilight Episode "It's a Good Life" -- which is probably the best ever Twilight Zone episode.

The biggest 'fault' I could find was that the Dwarven Farmer and Heavy Fog were a bit forced, but other than that it was a nearly flawless submission. Well done.
Yuul
You remade Animal Farm. The idea wasn't bad and helped you cover all of the ingredient bases. The downside for me is that I'm not sure how much I'd want to play this particular adventure. I mean, getting paid 750gp for giving a few sheep belly rubs?

Good effort, but you had the misfortune of running into Unko Talok this round.

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Old 11-13-2019, 08:05 PM
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Old 11-15-2019, 07:15 AM
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Old 11-17-2019, 02:30 PM
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The white void around you seems to fold in on itself, until it eventually takes the shape of the 'Honorable' Chairman. Apparently, the new decoration style has served its purpose, because as the whiteness manifests into the chairman, both competitors find themselves standing back in the iron grit sand where they started off. A metaphor, perhaps, for the fact that even as they progress through the competition, they really aren't going anywhere?

"Now then, let us take a look, shall we? A valiant effort by both of you, and some interesting takes. But only one of you can move on, proving he was, for today, too much for the other to handle." A wave of his staff and Yuul find themselves turned into a metal statue, with a fine white powder coating it in places.

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Unko Talok defeats Yuul and advances to the semi-finals.
 
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